Wake up each day without your love to look forward to,
Picturing your bright smile as I sit here in solitude,
Looking back to a time where I made you whole,
Our hearts fit perfectly as one keeping our lives in control,
We have grown up since then so it will be not be the same,
Realizing our freedom has vanished which is such a shame,
Remembering days of endless time we spent together,
Our plans of our future with the words love is forever,
My feelings for you over these years have never changed,
All you can say is that I act distant as if my heart has rearranged,
I would walk miles just to see you so I could hold you so very close,
Embracing you in my arms so my love for you would clearly show,
Seperation between us led us to only wanting to see each other more,
The words you said made me know you still wanted me for sure,
Saying my love I gave you, you had taken for granted,
Yet towards the end of our relationship I felt so abandoned,
Putting on a mask every morning pretending you are happy apart,
Believing that time heals nothing but hours unable to heal your heart,
Stating that the door is wide open for me with brand new furniture,
So I walked to you to come see that face I once completely adored,
Love is indeed happiness, love completes people you told me,
God does not save people; love and harmony is what saves us you see,
Peace in the heart saves rather than the cherising of this so called god ,
Still I do everything to show you that I care yet it seems to never be enough,
Saying that you are heartless when I know you can remember back on us,
So many blissful times with a romance that only grew stronger over the years,
Wake up to the fact that I will always be here so never ponder in fear,
Wishing that you would be as in love with me as you were from the start,
Never forget that our love is too unconditional to ever be apart
MY EDIT JOB
(not hatchet job i hope)
Sending this poem I wrote to boyfriend of 2 years who's been acting distant lately, thoughts?
The free verse format can turn on you. A message meant to be melodic, and carry the tenderest wishes of the heart for your beloved can come off as a worse screed than normal letter writing. Your poem has all the right sentiments, except for one item, the line: “Yet towards the end of our relationship...”
You seem very willing to get back with him, in fact you're praising him and reminding him of all the good you have together.What you have together isn't easy to replace, where are you going to find someone you have a meaningful history with who will put up with you, much less love you to boot? ( -:
Boredom with job, the everyday grind may be mistaken for distance between you. People nowadays walk out on relationships at the drop of a hat, when what's needed is some growing up, emotional maturity and stability, and a little reaching out to one another. If you think it gets easier to find someone to couple with, as time goes by, in my experience it isn't .
When I was young I fell in love with a Jewish girl from the suburbs of Detroit named Sheryl, who acted like she couldn't live without me, We had a daughter together we named Robin. I got a kick out of both my girls, we got married. Money was tight, but we got by and it seemed for a long time that having each other meant we didn't need a whole lot of cash for running around or entertainment. I finally joined the Army for the health protection and stability I couldn't find around Detroit in 1981, when the auto industry first got sick, and prime lending rates were 18% or higher. While I was at boot camp, she moved in with the downstairs neighbor, who still had a UAW job and money to party, money just to spend. She took our baby girl and walked out on me, for the bread! I was pissed and bummed out—for sure.
Even then I was smart enough to be concerned for my relationship future. The likelihood seemed non-existant I'd find someone as suited to me, for each other. We knew each other in school since she was 14 and I was 15 ½, we would still be together if she hadn't slipped off while I was away, I have little doubt there. Plus I have no desire for any 2nd family. I saw my cousins go through all that. Robin means too much to me to risk alienating her.
Robin's 30 now and attends grad school. She's pursuing a Ph.D. so she can be a college professor.
Sheryl's marriage to GM lasted a couple years, then they called it quits. I'm 50 and she's 48, we both are unmarried. We were lucky to have each other, and if she wasn't so conflicted with her guilt, we could be friends now. I never felt a connection to the girls and women I've known since, just had the fun I could, lived in sin a couple times, but the chasing has fallen off. We all hear about men who have money and use it to keep women around even into middle age. Beyond the envy money and its trappings bring us all to some degree, that's natural; holding a lady's interest that way holds little glamour out to me— that's like having a fair-weather friend who will ride shotgun until the good-times are over.
What do you think he will think of it? Do you think it'll make him change?
You ask if these written words will change him, I ask: change him into what? You repeatetedly sing his praises in verse. I'm thinking you like the guy as he is or you wouldn't go to this trouble to reach out to him. Both of you claim the other is distant, you (see above) and him (in about the middle of your poem).
Don't Let's Ever Forget
I still wake up picturing your smile
I always looked to you first each day,
like one may foresee the bright sun—
behind closed eyes that still sleep.
To make ready, even if it's a dream
My today's arrive without you to hold me,
In the midst of my grim solitude,
I'm often remembering back, in fact
I can see it perfectly now
Back to when it seemed I fit,
Then you said I made you whole,
Our hearts were in control,
We spent our lives together not just time
Nothing could get between us,
We just didn't allow it.
Our hearts were in control,
Will it be the same?
Our hearts are still in control, two lives one
Our perfect freedom still abides
Timeless days we had together,
Our future plans included Forever—
Our love is still in the forever column
Over these years my feelings for you haven't changed,
You say, “I act distant,“ like my heart's been rearranged,
But my feelings of love remain unchanged—
I would walk miles just to see you!
Just to hold you in my arms so very close,
Embrace you and display my love to you.
So my love for you would clearly show.
'Absence makes the heart grow fonder,'
Separation led us to each other more—
I believe you still want and care for me,
You still want the love I'm able to give—
Your words made me sure, when you said,
“You took my love for granted, the love I gave you...”
Yet I never felt so abandoned,
Forsaken even—as I did toward the end when we parted—
Our separation laid claim to some heavy dues,
An avalanche hit—the blues had me buried.
Putting on a mask every morning,
Pretending you are happy apart.
Keeping up a front;
You're really torn apart—alone,
Pretending, “Time heals all wounds,”
While knowing the truth all along—time heals nothing
The moving hands clocks possess heal no one
Passing hours won't mend a heart...
Stating, “The door is wide open for me with brand new furniture,”
So I walked to you; I went to see the face I once completely adored—
Love is happiness, indeed, “Love completes people,” you have told me—
God does not save people; love and harmony is what saves us you see,
Peace in the heart saves, rather than cherishing any so-called god ,
Still I do everything to show you I care yet it never seems to be enough,
I can't say you are heartless when I know you remember us,
Our romance that grew stronger over the years,
With so many blissful times...
I will always be here—wake up to that fact!
Never ponder in fear, wishing you were in love with me like it was at first,
Never forget—our love is too unconditional to ever stay apart.
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